Charlie II

Day 1. 7:07pm. Bernard. Bernard shifted the last cot into position. He knew they didn't look comfortable, but already he could feel sleep tugging from a corner of his mind. ...

Hmm, I dunno if there's gonna be enough people to fill the amount of races that we're devising. But, I've already planned so much already. We might need to do ...

Hey, I promised you a crit :) I've saved it as a Microsoft Word document. If you've not got Word then give me a PM and I'll save it as ...

Fantastic. Absolutely fantastic. I think we've talked about the level that this is at so, without further ado, here's my critique. I did spend two school-days on it, so that ...

*Looks like Wiki and Charlotte have teamed up for the moment. Probably because neither are trying to take control right now. Actually, that's quite good with the intellectual and spiritual ...

There's no such thing as bad publicity. Publicity = publicity. If you're known, infamously or famously, you are still known. Plus, everyone loves a bit of intrigue. My opinion? I ...

You ready? This is gonna be in-depth. Ok, different critiquing style. I hope you've got Microsoft Word, if not, yell out and I'll work something else out. You know where ...

*Mad, you wanna have your character pick on mine before he realises she isn't the weakest member? Might give a chance for our characters to get to know each other.* ...

Profile Name : Charlotte (to hell with it! I'll be a girl :P) Age : 14 Appearance : Very pale blonde hair and electric blue eyes. Her complexion is clear ...

Nice style! This is the first one I've read (obviously) so I'll try to work it out as I go along. Just a few comments: This morning, after I rolled ...

I liked this! No jokes! But there's always something that can be changed: Twelve cloaked figures stood in a circle; the walls surrounding them were illuminated by a [s]strange [/s]blue ...

Markus "He went in!" "Sure?" "Definitely. He's going up to her room now!" Mark looked at his Dæmon in disbelief. Few people visited Lyra anymore, especially when she was studying ...

I think it is natural to be less critical to those who we think can take it. I always glance at the writer's age before I critique because that's the ...

Day 1. 6:06pm. Bernard. How come Kevin didn't put me with Elaina?! Bernard blinked and tried to clear away his thoughts. They weren't helping, he needed to be strong. He ...

Character Name : Markus Wrent Gender : Male Age : 16 Present Location : Jordan College Appearance : Brown haired, brown eyed and lanky but not physically strong. His size ...